- My worst story is entitled "work of art". First of all the title is not appealing to people who hate art. Next thing is that my worst story does not have a good grammatical structure and lack of common sense. For example (1)"I think learn countries can learn from a lot of crafts, for example, I have a wooden ruler, this ruler came form China..." Huh? It also lack of logic connection between events, like (2)"In an African old man's house I found a half-naked sculpture, the old man told me this sculpture recorded one of the oldest human civilization, at that time, human beings are the half. Fellow Indians took out his sculpture that is a man in the joy of drums...". The story does not go with the flow here, and it is painful to read.
- My best story-in-the-box started like this (3)"Once upon a time in a far away land..."; very appealing the reader and makes him want to follow the story. The author connected the items in a way that they are not only listed but they make the story (4)"The king sailed to East Africa where he met a Masai woman along the way whom gave him advice on how to be loyal to his people." They are active.
(1) http://yifuchen.blogspot.com/
(2) http://yifuchen.blogspot.com/
(3) http://en191fl12s28mohamedto.blogspot.com/
(4) http://en191fl12s28mohamedto.blogspot.com/
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